A Picture-Perfect Moment

1000 Words Take Two
Photo courtesy of Cheri Lucas.

 
The tram clutters its way clumsily up the slow incline; its bell clanking noisily to notify those nearby of its presence. She laughs at its wheezy passing as she imagines that she and her husband sound something similar as they slowly make their way up the low, broad steps.

She turns to study the man walking beside her. The aqua and white stripes of his t-shirt stretch to accommodate the generous belly that makes him ideal for the role of Santa that he plays for the local children at the end of every year. His profile is one she has studied for 46 years and slept beside for 43.

As they draw level to the dark red door, he suddenly catches her gaze and smiles slowly, knowingly: the arm he has wrapped across her lower back squeezing her closer. The startling light grey of his eyes twinkle merrily at her and she smiles widely at his mischievously-contagious grin. Theirs is an intimately shared secret.

Across the road and four steps up from where they now stood, was where he asked her to become his wife. As she stares at the spot, she can clearly see them as they had been on that day: he dressed in a navy t-shirt and the beige boarder shorts with the pocket over the bum that she had admired on their first meeting and she in a floral print dress with the gathered waist that she had pick up for a song in a second hand shop that had long since closed and passed out of memory.

She remembers the surprise and joy that lit up his face when she said yes. The way he gently wrapped his arms around her shoulders, slowly drew her up against him and then rested his right cheek against hers. He’d taken a long, deep breath that caused his chest to brush lightly across her nipples – sending a jolt of pleasure that left her dizzy. And when he exhaled “Thank You” against her ear, she had been unable to do anything more than spread her hands against his back and tremble.
 

As her thoughts slowly return to the present day, she gazes again at her husband. After all the time they have spent together, this is what she loves most about him. Every time that they pass that dark red door, he looks at her, smiles that slow, knowing grin and touches her. And together, they walk up those four steps until they are stood across the road from the point that marks the start of her greatest happiness.

 
 

This piece was written and submitted as part of WordPress.com’s Weekly Writing Challenge. The writing challenges are designed to “help you to push your writing boundaries, show off your blogging chops, and, hopefully, spark more post ideas”. The posts should be specifically written in response to the challenge set.

This week’s challenge was to “write a post based on this picture” i.e. the one that opens this post. You can see how other bloggers responded to the challenge, on 1,000 Words, Take Two.
 

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17 thoughts on “A Picture-Perfect Moment

  1. I love this capture, this fictional slice of life as it were.

    I just have one critique

    “Four steps up from where they are stood and across the road, was where he asked her to become his wife”
    The sentence comes off as choppy to me and takes a moment to visualize, Also you’re mixing tenses. It’s either ‘are standing’ or ‘they stood’ I think the following reads a little easier: Across the road and four steps up and from where they now stood, was where he asked her to become his wife.

    Other than that? Bravo!

    1. Thanks for this Raivenne, I couldn’t work out why that line didn’t quite work. One edit coming up. :-)

      This exercise was a bit of a surprise. The juxtaposition of the older and younger couples just caught my eye and the story kind of wrote itself as I stared at the image.

      1. Oopsie! Let me further edit and say take out the second “and” after the word “up”. I forget to delete it when I was reordering the phrase.

        Sometimes you have to hammer at it and sometimes the words just flow. Don’t over think the easy ones, just enjoy the results.

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